Sunday, August 07, 2005

Flash Fiction #2 - Oops I Did It Again

I put the "Do Not Disturb" sign on the door, shut it, locked it, and turned around to find that I had locked myself on the wrong side of the door. No. This is not happening to me. Not again. I looked frantically down the hall at the elevator, but my boyfriend was well on his way down to the lobby by now. I tried to turn the knob every which way but - duh - it was locked. I kicked it - which resulted only in breaking a toenail. I even tried shouldering the door like they do in the tough guy movies. No luck.

So there I stood.
On the wrong side of the door.
In the hallway of the hotel.
In my underwear.

I ran down the hall to the house phone and called the lobby. The men at the desk called the floor, and tracked down which table he was playing. They always keep an eye on the high rollers. It's never been a problem finding him.

"What. Don't tell me you locked yourself out again?"

"Yes, I did. I know, I know! Hurry! I'm in my underwear here!"

"Fine, I'm on my way. You are so lucky to have me."

"I know I am, dear."

I snuck into the hallway bathroom. I splashed my face and fixed my hair. At least I looked presentable. And then I sat down on the counter and waited for my husband to come up and let me back in our room.

27 comments:

Übermilf said...

Short, but sweet.

I wrote one, too.

The Moviequill said...

nicely done...I am so visual on this

darth said...

i can so see this.

Girl With An Alibi said...

Interesting... Boyfriend leaves and husband must let her back in. Very kinky. How, very indecent proposal of you. A++

Melliferous Pants said...

Perfect flash Brooke!

Neil said...

Loved that ending! But as someone who always looks for the "writer" in a novel, I'm wondering what this story says about you.

JJ said...

Very funny, SMG. But, uh, ahem, husband? Do we need to talk?

TN_Dreamer said...

yes, the boyfriend & husband was a nice touch.

gone said...

CHEATER! Boyfriend leaving, husband playing blackjack! At least you met JJ's provacative content requirement.

MoDigli said...

hehehe....

Good job, Brooke! :)

Funny, I never did get anything written for it, even though I told JJ I would. (Sorry JJ! I promise to try it sometime, though.)

The weirdest thing is that I really did think about this weekend, and all I could come up with was some story where a character would have locked themselves on the wrong side! .... There goes our weird twin thing again!

You did so much better than I could have ever hoped to though! :)

JJ said...

Next week's FFF first line is going to be something like "I, MoMo, decided to..." so you'll have to play along.

WhiteBoyBob said...

Good start to a movie that. You really ought to write more; or maybe you do in secret and you'll be the next JK Rowling, only talented and less derivative.

Evil Petting Zoo said...

You're a saucy vixen. Write that down.

gone said...

saucy vixen indeed. That was clever, funny, and down right dirty! I loved it. Good job, Brooke!

TrueJerseyGirl said...

Good job! Now, let me just clarify...this week you remembered to do FICTION right? This isn't another TRUE story? ;)

MoDigli said...

Ok, JJ!!! LOL!

BTW, Today is Brooke's first day of school with the kiddies!

Oooohhh... Brooke! Post something delicious for us, okay?

I'm thinking of you!! :)

Brookelina said...

Ok, just so you all know, this is FICTION! I am NOT married, therefore I have NOT cheated on my husband. Is this how I would be if I were married? God I hope not. Maybe this was a payback for all the times I've been cheated on. Bastads!

Brookelina said...

By the way, thanks for all the nice kudos! I wish I had more time to write stuff like this. Too fun.

The real me said...

Can someone explain to me what this FF is?
Sorry, novice here...

yournamehere said...

I had to miss Fast Fiction Friday because of my trip home. I did take part in Sloppily Sloshed Saturday, however. Sadly, Sex with a Stranger Sunday wasn't meant to be.

a.m. griffin said...

Very nice. something so elegant and debonair about the conclusion. i liked.

Neil said...

You say this is just fiction, but is it? Of all the possible stories you could have written, you immediately chose one where you are juggling two men in your life. Your "character" also has a habit of running around hotels in her underwear. As I know writers tend to gravitate to writing "what they know," I can only assume from your fiction that you are a prim and proper teacher during the day/underwear nymph at night.

BamaGirl said...

Great short story! Very "Casino". How was your first day? Is your voice hoarse? My first day is Aug. 29. Schools start late out here in California.

im here somewhere said...

sex with a stranger sunday?? did i start that one? cause thats seems to be how my sundays have been.

good story brooke. you didnt say what kind of underwear...if you were topless or in bra and panties..??i always have a bad dream that im topless running into the grocery store to get some bread..

Ruben said...

Are you sure this is fiction? Lol

sunshine said...

...please please pleeeeeze tell us how the first day went!

Brookelina said...

RM - I think JJ explained already on his blog. :) Try it next time!

YNH -sounds like a perfect weekend.

AM - elegant and debonair. Thank you!

Neil - what other character ran around in her underwear!! You are mixing me up with one of your other blog chicks.

Bama - school doesn't start late there, it starts too early here!

lilred - I actually considered the topless thing, or even a shortie robe, but I didn't want to distract from the story too much with gratuitous nudity.

Ruben - you shut up! lol

Sunny and all - I promise to write about my first days at school this weekend. And a hug to all of you for caring so much!